Jasmine Hart

Sunday Submission Process Hollow clunk in the pit of the post-box, ravenous stomach never quite filled, and constant, forced bulimic projections, with another's hand thrust down the throat. Little mor

Thanks everyone. I've made some changes but, I don't know, I think I want to do a whole new draft, so I'll see what I can come up with... Concertina ...

Thanks Stella. Yes, it's set on Inis Mor. That's a very good suggestion. I'll work on fleshing him out when I rewrite.

Ok...this seems to be floundering. Are people lost, disinterested, or lacking in time?If we can see what the problems are we can work on fixing them...

Here's Friday's disaster; Frozen, ink-stained, near asleep with my insides shifted, sense face down and my Times New Roman drought causing me to lie on the couch with the magic ...

Tempest Tempest returned from work, kicked off her shoes, and changed into her sitting-around-the house clothes. She made a quick dinner, and ate it in the dimly lit kitchen, with ...

April 15: I love the first line and, " I am not a parasite, seas, oceans, infesting",but I think the rest could be tightend up a tad. Maybe change the ...

April 13: I'll admit that I don't get it, but the language is lovely and it flows well. Maybe think about "porcelain skin", as I think it's a tad cliche.

As a whole, I think this is a really unique concept, well expressed. I love the first staza, especially the perfect sibillance of the last line. I think I'd change ...

Wednesday Wine and Name Dropping I can feel the wine seeping to the soles of my feet. My head's... magnolia? Mahogany? Well, full of rich velvet, bobbing on a nectar ...

Tuesday April 15th I am cat-curled and melting into thirsting blades of grass, my palm newly speckled with half-moons and cs; other fingers braided with yours, my eyes shut. And ...

Thanks Kit. Monday April 14th 2008 I think I'll fill my head with Austen, amateurs, Irish verbs, aproaching exams, fresh-ink stale grades, and how we rushed across the cobbles to ...

It's really great, whence. I really love; "scrape the knob away. Heel toe, heel toe." and "You interrupt, nodding, high-browed, with “No, none at all.” " I'm not sure about; ...

I really enjoyed this. It's very fresh, and I like what you're saying. Short and to the point. The last two lines are great. My only problem is; "hand Parisian, ...

I really love it. Your imagery is vivid and it flows well. I think the last three stanzas are better than the first two. I'm not sure about the first ...